When proofreading, what is the main error that should be corrected in this paragraph?
The author makes the assumption that because students from Waymarsh did not attend the protest, they must not care about educational funding, but this is not necessarily correct. The college students may have chosen to display their concerns through other avenues, such as writing letters to the state legislature or signing petitions. It is a faulty assumption to say that by not participating in one form of protest, the students did not participate at all. The author should have addressed whether or not the students were actively fighting the budget cuts in other ways in order to make his or her argument stronger. In conclusion, the author did not make a strong argument because his or her conclusion was based on unsupported assumptions. The conclusion and evidence provided in the prompt did not provide enough information to be convincing.
This paragraph should be separated into two different paragraphs.
The writer does not provide examples.
The paragraph is too repetitive.
There are grammar errors.
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